A Dream About A World...
Apr. 1st, 2012 08:18 pm![[personal profile]](https://www.dreamwidth.org/img/silk/identity/user.png){kind=small}
ellyssianThanks for the comments on the earlier post! I needed to hear them and think about it before proceeding.
I kind of took some of the advice and none of it ~ the way the story told itself, it just serves as an introductory to the world and the characters, so I could mostly avoid describing details about what happened in the Empire to leave the Empress in such a position of powerlessness. This shows the story in a different light than I was afraid it was going to be seen in. For his part, the warrior oratificates a bit, then overthrows the bureaucracy (one of his archers has to kill the Captain of her Guard), but after he announces things, she pretty much takes over (to the point of giving his archer the order to do the aforementioned act...)
Anyway, new short story, and a new world (or lands, at the least) to host more stories in the future! =)
I kind of took some of the advice and none of it ~ the way the story told itself, it just serves as an introductory to the world and the characters, so I could mostly avoid describing details about what happened in the Empire to leave the Empress in such a position of powerlessness. This shows the story in a different light than I was afraid it was going to be seen in. For his part, the warrior oratificates a bit, then overthrows the bureaucracy (one of his archers has to kill the Captain of her Guard), but after he announces things, she pretty much takes over (to the point of giving his archer the order to do the aforementioned act...)
Anyway, new short story, and a new world (or lands, at the least) to host more stories in the future! =)